Choco_cherries: Live Wire

[lirazel]

Yay for the return of choco_cherries!

Title: Live Wire
Author: Lirazel (penny_lane_42)
Fandoms: Heroes/Veronica Mars
Pairing: Elle Bishop/Logan Echolls
Word Count: 253
Prompt: Cold
Rating: PG
Summary:   After a while, he stops trying to see someone else when he looks at her (she hopeswishespretends).

After a while, he stops trying to see someone else when he looks at her (she hopeswishespretends).  He still doesn’t like New York: no place to surf, it rains too much, and the hotel they’re living in is too full of celebrities who recognize him.  But he isn’t homesick: she doubts there’s any place he could actually miss (they’re alike in that way, at least). 

 She doesn’t tell him what she can do, what it is she’s running from.  He doesn’t tell her what he’s done, what it is he’s running to.  They have fun together, an almost normal kind of fun (even if there’s a wrongness lurking everywhere, in every word, every touch, and mostly in the silences they can’t avoid), and she can (almost) pretend she’s a regular girl with a regular boyfriend living a regular life.  Almost.

Thing is, he’s always going to be looking over his shoulder for a different girl; she’s never going to be able to give him what he needs.  She tells herself that that doesn’t really matter—it’s all in fun.  But she knows (so does he).  

When he isn’t snarking or drinking or screwing, he’s brooding.

“What’s wrong?” she asks, and maybe it’s the first time she’s ever really cared enough to ask that question (it scares her that she actually means it).

 “I’m cold,” he says, with an ironic twist to his voice (it’s her favorite thing about him).

She smiles, slowly, lets the electricity dance at her fingertips.  “I can fix that.”

Comments

[ava-leigh-fitz.livejournal.com]

Yay for the Logan/Elle love!

I just adored this. Adored this.

I love that you have this way of mirroring, of contrasting the two characters. It's like a thing of yours, I noticed it a lot in your Micah/Molly fic I'm stilltrying to get over. It doesn't ever feel forced, just natural reflections on the two of them as both a unit and seperate people. It shows their differences and their similarities all at the same time.

I love your use of the prompt, the way it just slides itself in there, all perfect and normal and significant in that it's usually not. She asks the question and cares about his answer and that's a big step.

My favourite line though, has to be this:

(even if there’s a wrongness lurking everywhere, in every word, every touch, and mostly in the silences they can’t avoid),

Oh just broke my heart because she knows, perhaps not fully, about Veronica. She knows that there is an edge of wrong to what they're doing. And she can feel it and so can he; when they do it's unavoidable and silent. Just love for that idea.

[ava-leigh-fitz.livejournal.com]

Also, the slightly malicious end to it, where you're so sure she won't hurt him but there's a lingering thought that perhaps she might because he doesn't know what she can do.

[penny-lane-42.livejournal.com]

Ha! Yay! That's exactly what I was trying to communicate! So glad that got through.

[penny-lane-42.livejournal.com]

Lots of mutual Logan/Elle fic love going on, cuz of course I loved yours. And I'm so glad you liked this one!

I hadn't really thought about it, but I do think I have a tendency to do the mirroring thing. It's a lot of fun, and I'm really glad you don't think it feels forced.

all perfect and normal and significant in that it's usually not. She asks the question and cares about his answer and that's a big step. Glad that that worked for you. That is what I was going for.

And yes, I can't imagine Elle not picking up on something that would let her know about Veronica. I know he would never tell her, but she would know that there was some other girl and that she looked like her. It just has to be that way.

[ineffort.livejournal.com]

When he isn’t snarking or drinking or screwing, he’s brooding. LOVE that line. Oh, Logan. I see not much has changed and am pleased to hear it.

This was incredibly awesome as always. And you killed the prompt.

[penny-lane-42.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I think I would be pretty heartbroken if Logan ever did change. He has to stay Logan.

And you killed the prompt. Heehee! Thanks!

[pyroblaze18.livejournal.com]

This is so good that it's scary. Especially with that last image. O.O

[penny-lane-42.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! So glad you liked it!

[everything-inme.livejournal.com]

Oh my God. I just found this, and I... am in love. I saw the pairing and then saw who wrote it and nearly had a heart attack because so few people would ever be able to pull them off, but you totally did and I just... GAH! I love this. I love the subtext and the thoughts in parenthesis and the fact that Logan looks for Veronica in a girl who's totally different and yet still the same. I love that Elle keeps playing pretend even when she knows that it won't last.

And I especially love THAT LAST LINE. Good God! This is going in my memories. You win. ♥

[penny-lane-42.livejournal.com]

*blushes* Thank you so much! I'm so glad that you enjoyed it that much--I had such fun writing it: those two are so incredibly twisted that I couldn't resist. I'm also so glad that everything worked for you, and I'm incredibly flattered that you would like it enough to add it your memories.

Again, thank you so much for your kind words. They totally made my day!