http://potaoto.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] potaoto.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] lirazel 2012-06-07 11:46 pm (UTC)

oh man, ouch, this is great. i really like how you formatted and how this flowed in general. and your characterizations were so spot on. hyunsoo's internal monologue is so painfully true to his character—like, he probably did think all these things, and yerim! ahh, i love how you depicted her role in hyunsoo's life as the life buoy he was so reluctant to cling to. i also love the contrasting positive/negative theme you had going on, with the hyunsoo loves her/hates her, byunghee is the best thing/worst thing, etc.

ahhh there's just so much i like about this. i think your interpretation of eye candy's relationship was really accurate too, like how hyunsoo was only really friends with byunghee because of jihyuk and how he only clung to the band because letting go meant letting go of jihyuk. and this line: Hyunsoo knows: when Eye Candy played, for Jihyuk Byunghee was the only other one on stage. dlksjglf right in the feels ;_;

and sob: Byunghee is gone, but Hyunsoo is still here. ;;;;

i can't even articulate all the things i want to say!! but ty for writing and sharing and i look forward to your next sufbb fic!

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