Haha, I just read the other reviews, and it looks like I'm not the only one who fell completely and utterly in love with this sentence:
nobody can love with the ferocity of twelve years old, unless it’s eighteen when the whole world is epic
You really got all of their voices down, and I love that you managed to get through 80% of a Veronica Mars fic without saying the name of Veronica herself. You didn't say her name until you absolutely had to, with Duncan, because Duncan's so tied up in her that there's no way to avoid it (even though I'm a rabid Logan/Veronica fan myself, I won't deny for a second that Duncan really and truly loves her).
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nobody can love with the ferocity of twelve years old, unless it’s eighteen when the whole world is epic
You really got all of their voices down, and I love that you managed to get through 80% of a Veronica Mars fic without saying the name of Veronica herself. You didn't say her name until you absolutely had to, with Duncan, because Duncan's so tied up in her that there's no way to avoid it (even though I'm a rabid Logan/Veronica fan myself, I won't deny for a second that Duncan really and truly loves her).
Anyway, bravo.